Ok, I’ve returned and I must say that this is just the beginning of a possibly amazing story it’s mostly my impatience with the pacing and questionable plot that disappointed me.
Probs will pick up bc of how many people think it’s a masterpiece. Again these comments were my critiques of the story I was reading which probs was not as well thought out as later chapters. Sorry if I offended anyone lol.
I wonder if she’s going to make it though, Sylvia’s been helping him and all… I hope she dosen’t…? and the mom I hope she dosen’t think his dead even though it’s been weeks!
Sure the bamdits ambushed, attempted murder, attempted human trafficking, physically assaulted innocent bystanders, however, they just feel like cheap plot tactics and doesn’t engage the reader. Making them look bad, sound bad and act bad doesn’t make an arch-nemesis, it just looks like poor writing for exaggerating the op mc trope and implying that the fully grown trained adults are nothing compared to the ex-king baby with cool op powers, which isn’t realistic. Thanks for listening to my ted talk.
cinderella
monster just like her mother dontt die please
Drowned Rat
Sylvia don’t die on me 🙁
Jojos romantic adventures
Noooo Sylviaaaa pls don’t die
Gameed
So the mc gonna get the overpowered plot armour now ?
PsychoPrincess
oh no I hope she doesn’t die….
The new law
Ok, I’ve returned and I must say that this is just the beginning of a possibly amazing story it’s mostly my impatience with the pacing and questionable plot that disappointed me.
Probs will pick up bc of how many people think it’s a masterpiece. Again these comments were my critiques of the story I was reading which probs was not as well thought out as later chapters. Sorry if I offended anyone lol.
MISS GALAXY WORLD
I wonder if she’s going to make it though, Sylvia’s been helping him and all… I hope she dosen’t…? and the mom I hope she dosen’t think his dead even though it’s been weeks!
The new law
Sure the bamdits ambushed, attempted murder, attempted human trafficking, physically assaulted innocent bystanders, however, they just feel like cheap plot tactics and doesn’t engage the reader. Making them look bad, sound bad and act bad doesn’t make an arch-nemesis, it just looks like poor writing for exaggerating the op mc trope and implying that the fully grown trained adults are nothing compared to the ex-king baby with cool op powers, which isn’t realistic. Thanks for listening to my ted talk.
The new law
This pacing is too fast, like, we met all those characters 4 chapters ago and mc already wants them dead